Roaming Shadow

Ah, Eramus! I remember him from the character dialogue way back when. I think it was he who made reference to the origins of Conall's name. Or was that the ...

Here we go, some history. Not quite what I was expecting, but if everything went as expected, it wouldn’t be an interesting story, would it? However, going back a full ...

Foreword: I’m not going to look too hard for grammar or spelling mistakes, as those are things that are usually easily found when you reread it or edit it. I’ll ...

“Aye, it’s a full moon tonight." This feels more like you're telling the reader than the guard. Either mention it in the narrative or say it after the warning. By ...

This is simply an "Eragon-is-a-complete-rip-off-I-hate-this-book" rant. Nothing more, nothing less. The structuring suggests that this was trown together in a matter of minutes, with only enough resea

I had high hopes (though not too high), and found myself dissapointed, especially at the ending. It was a different take on the whole werewolf thing, and it was recommended ...

First thing's first. Grif is certainly an unusuial name, though it actually doesn't sound unrealistic for modern times. However, it is far enough off the beaten path that new people ...

I haven't read what you've already posted, but after reading this, I have to say, you've got me interested. If anything I bring up is addressed in the main writing, ...

Okay, just what is the moron trying to acomplish in all this? With how he just kinda stumbles through it, he's either a complete and utter moron or rediculously cocky. ...

As to the starting of school in your last post, I guess I hadn't put it together that they moved into town in the middle of the school year. No ...

Okay, first thing that I'm sure anyone else would say, try to avoid info dumps right at the start. That's basically all this is, in my opinion. While all the ...

I printed off up to chapter six for critique a while ago, so if you've already worked out things I point out, I apologize. I just don't want to reprint ...

Well, the first thing I have to say is that the chapter is nearly exclusively dialogue. While dialogue is important, you need to do more than have two people talk ...

I meant to get to this earlier, but I'm here now, and so I will critique. Interesting little start, and I liked how you ended it as well. The beginning ...

1st part: Uhh, well, I'm really not sure what to say here. The writing seems rather simple, yet this isn't a negative factor, not really. There just doesn't seem to ...